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The story of Loops

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Post by AnonymousMouseOwner Tue 17 Jan 2017, 2:36 am

I usually am not into writing, and don't like reading books much, but I had fun making up this story. It's completely made up, it's about a mouse who was lonely and tried really hard to get adopted, but never had much luck. The mouse character is named Loops, and he is put in a scary situation with a snake in the story, but the ending is happy, he is not harmed by the snake Smile I'll put it under a spoiler anyway though. I'm not the best writer, but hopefully someone will enjoy this story! Ear wiggle

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The end! Hope you enjoyed this story! Smile

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Post by CinnamonPearl Tue 17 Jan 2017, 5:50 am

What a cute story! I'm a writer myself. Never written about mice though.

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Post by stephlisa Tue 17 Jan 2017, 7:14 am

I was so glad it had a happy ending!!! Smile Cute Smile

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Post by Peachy Tue 17 Jan 2017, 10:33 am

Aww, cute story. Thanks for sharing it! Smile

I just recently began finishing up a fun sci-fi/fantasy story that I worked on a couple years ago. And reading back, I actually love it! It was never meant to be read by anyone but me, I'm a picky reader and was tired of being disappointed by other books. lol But I might have to share it with my husband because he won't leave me alone about it. Laughing
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Post by MesaMouse Tue 17 Jan 2017, 2:15 pm

That was beautiful, Anonymous, very thoughtful and well-written. Thanks so much for sharing the story of Loops!

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Post by scaredymouse Tue 17 Jan 2017, 5:08 pm

what a sweet little story!!!!! i loved it <3

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Post by MooMouse Tue 17 Jan 2017, 6:02 pm

You are so creative, Anonymous, great work! I really enjoyed reading it, it made me feel sad, scared and happy for little Loops at the end. I think that in order to be a good writer, you have to make people feel things, instead of just reading them. You have definitely accomplished that, well done!

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Post by scaredymouse Tue 17 Jan 2017, 6:09 pm

i agree with moo, i really felt for the little mouse. i even got a little weepy at the end... i was going to keep that to myself, but it's a great accomplishment to make the reader care about the character.

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